The chart below show how frequently people in US ate in fast food restaurants between 2003 2013

The chart below show how frequently people in US ate in fast food restaurants between 2003 2013
The chart below illustrates how frequently
folk
in
US
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the US
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ate
junk
food
restaurants between 2003, 2006 and 2013.As you can see, A few
of
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apply
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people
prefer
ate
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to eat
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fast
food
everyday
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and never.
According to
the graph, In 2003 nearly 5
percent
of
folk
prefer ate
junk
food
every day.
In addition
, In 2006 and 2013 have
a
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the
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same rate.
Also
, In 2003 about 16
percent
of
people
ate fast
food
several times a week.
Moreover
, about 30
percent
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per cent
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of
folk
once or twice a month went to
the
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apply
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restaurants and ate fast
food
and about 14
percent
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per cent
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of
folk
a few times a year ate
junk
food
.
Also
, In 2003 5
percent
of
folk
never ate fast
food
.
Also
,
It is clear that
the most of percentage is
blong
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belong
to 2006 and 2013
as you can see in 2006 about 33
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, as you can see in 2006 about 33 percent of people,
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percent
of
people
prefer
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preferred
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once a week went to the restaurant and ate fast
food
. In conclusion, In the
past
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past,
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a
little
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small
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percentage of
people
went to the restaurant and ate not healthy
meal
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meals
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.
However
, In 2003, 2006 and 2013 a few
percentage
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percentages
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of
folk
perefer
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prefer
ate fast
food
everyday
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every day
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or never. Ergo, It is obvious that in all
this
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these
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3 years
a
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apply
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most of
people
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the people
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who live in
US
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the US
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prefer
ate
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to eat
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junk
food
once a week or twice a month at
the
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a
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restruant
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restaurant
.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "also".
Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 89%.
Vocabulary: Replace the words folk, junk, food, people, percent with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 4 times.
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