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folk
in US
ate Correct article usage
the US
junk
food
restaurants between 2003, 2006 and 2013.As you can see, A few of
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apply
people
prefer ate
fast Change the verb form
to eat
food
everyday
and never.
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every day
According to
the graph, In 2003 nearly 5 percent
of folk
prefer ate junk
food
every day. In addition
, In 2006 and 2013 have a
same rate. Correct article usage
the
Also
, In 2003 about 16 percent
of people
ate fast food
several times a week. Moreover
, about 30 percent
of Change the spelling
per cent
folk
once or twice a month went to the
restaurants and ate fast Correct article usage
apply
food
and about 14 percent
of Change the spelling
per cent
folk
a few times a year ate junk
food
. Also
, In 2003 5 percent
of folk
never ate fast food
.Also
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the most of percentage is blong
to 2006 and 2013Correct your spelling
belong
as you can see in 2006 about 33
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, as you can see in 2006 about 33 percent of people,
percent
of people
prefer
once a week went to the restaurant and ate fast Wrong verb form
preferred
food
.
In conclusion, In the past
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past,
little
percentage of Correct word choice
small
people
went to the restaurant and ate not healthy meal
. Fix the agreement mistake
meals
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percentages
folk
perefer
ate fast Correct your spelling
prefer
food
everyday
or never. Ergo, It is obvious that in all Replace the word
every day
this
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these
a
most of Correct article usage
apply
people
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the people
US
prefer Correct article usage
the US
ate
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to eat
junk
food
once a week or twice a month at the
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a
restruant
.Correct your spelling
restaurant
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