The diagram below shows the process by which bricks are manufactured for the building industry. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The diagram illustrates the way in which
bricks
are produced for the building industry. Overall
, the process consists of seven stages, beginning with digging the clay
and ending up with the delivery stage.
First of all, clay
is collected by a digger to serve as a raw material for brick. After that, the clay
goes through a metal grid and is placed into a roller. Next sand and water are added to the clay
and it goes through a wire-cutting stage, where bricks
form.
In the next stage, bricks
are placed into the dying oven for a period between 24 to 48 hours. Then
, in a kiln, bricks
first are heated at 200-980 degrees, after that temperature goes higher to 870-1300 degrees. After the heating, bricks
are placed into a chamber, where they cool for about 48 to 72 hours. Finally
, the bricks
are packed and are ready to be delivered.Submitted by dasha.20032854 on
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