In the developed world, average life expectancy is increasing. What problems will this cause for individuals and society? Suggest some measures that could be taken to reduce the impact of ageing populations.

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modern
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age
, average life expectancy is growing and ageing populations are a common
problem
for many developed countries in the world and a ticking
problem
that can cause inflation to the economy in the long term. On the surface, an ageing population would increase the pressure on the working
age
group
.
For example
, the government budget to pay retired people,
usually
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comes from taxes of the working
age
group
, will increase
while
the working
group
are reduced in number, to combat
this
, tax increasing policy will be applied and would place a heavy burden on the working
age
group
, which in the long term would cause major stress to the young generation.
Although
it is an urgent
problem
, the answer to
this
problem
can already be seen
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some countries like Australia, USA, and Japan.
For instance
, immigration policy is one of the solutions to
this
problem
.
By bringing
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a new
work force
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at a younger
age
to their country,
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would increase the number of taxes
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to the government, plus they would
also
pay to attend schools and bring more value to the countries that help
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out the margin or retired population. Turning to the next solution, the government can increase the
age
of retirement to lengthen the working period to help lower the number of people they need to support.
However
,
this
solution is temporary and they will still face the
problem
again if they
could not
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find a more effective plan. In conclusion, there are many measures to resolve
this
problem
but a
long term
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plan should be figured out as soon as possible.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • average life expectancy
  • developed world
  • increase
  • individuals
  • society
  • personal goals
  • ambitions
  • quality of life
  • leisure
  • recreation
  • healthcare costs
  • challenges
  • healthcare system
  • ageing population
  • shortage
  • available workers
  • economy
  • retirement planning
  • healthy lifestyles
  • investing
  • social support systems
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