Some people believe that professionals , such as doctors and engineers, should be required to work in the country where they did their training. others believe they should be free to work in another country if they wish. Discuess both these views and give your opinion.
Whereas
some individuals believe that experts
, such
as doctors, engineers and architects, should remain in their
countries Change the word
the
which
they Change preposition
in which
trained
, others feel that they should choose wherever they want to start their tendencies. Add a missing verb
are trained
According to
these views
it would Add a comma
views,
bbe
better if there should be a balance between these opinions.
On the one hand, It is vitally important for the governments to utilize Correct your spelling
be
such
these
professionals in their own countries in various positions. In Correct determiner usage
apply
this
way
their investment in Add a comma
way,
such
areas would be preserve
. Change the verb form
be preserved
For
instance
Add a comma
instance,
such
kinds of masters, play an
significant role Change the article
a
on
the Change preposition
in
developing
of a country. As an example of Replace the word
development
this
statement
I could say Add a comma
statement,
such
a
Correct article usage
apply
talanted
and experienced Correct your spelling
talented
enginners
could Correct your spelling
engineers
built
modern Change the verb form
build
be built
skycrapers
. another benefit of Correct your spelling
skyscrapers
this
view is that the experts
do not feel of
homesick or Change preposition
apply
loneliness
when they work in their Replace the word
lonely
mother land
.
Correct your spelling
motherland
On the other hand
, some people believe that experts
could decide about their futures. I mean if there are job oppourtunities
Correct your spelling
opportunities
in
Change preposition
apply
the
Correct article usage
apply
oversea
, they should be better that have Correct your spelling
overseas
chance
to make Correct article usage
a chance
decision
about their lives by Fix the agreement mistake
decisions
this
view is that in 1990s
. Germany accepts plenty of migrants to increase Change the article
the 1990s
experts
in its country. Although
experts
leave their birth place, they support their families, also
earn a large amount of money better than their own countries.
In conclusion, Correct word choice
and also
This the
governments should Correct determiner usage
apply
decided
to provide Change the verb form
decide
balance
Replace the word
balanced
opprtunities
for each Correct your spelling
opportunities
indivituals
.Correct your spelling
individuals
individual
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