The bar graph below shows the amount of carbon emissions in different countries during three different years. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The bar graph below shows the amount of carbon emissions in different countries during three different years. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The bar graph illustrates the result of
carbon
emmisions
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emissions
in several countries by the
year
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years
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1975, 1990, and 2005. From
overall
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perspective, it is readily apparent that the
amount
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number
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of
carbon
emmisions
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emissions
at
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in
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USA
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the USA
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,
China
,
Canada
, and
India
increase
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has increased
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throughout the years
while
the two other countries act the opposite way.
Also
, the highest figure from the recorded year out of all nations is
USA
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the USA
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.
The
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beginning year of 1975,
USA
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the USA
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produced 1.200.000 metric tonnes
carbon
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of carbon
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accounted
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accounting
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for the highest
on
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at
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that time. There are significant differences
with
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between
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China
, and Germany where they produced around 200.000.
Then
followed by United Kingdom(180.000),
Canada
(150.000)
an
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and
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India
(50.000) respectively.
The
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next 15 years,
USA
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the USA
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increase
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increased
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gradually to 1.250.000 considerably higher than
china
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China
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for
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at
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640.000.
This
time, Germany
resulting
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resulted
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in
steady
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a steady
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level as before
while
Canada
and
India
rise to 150.000 and 200.000 in turn. Fortunately,
United
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the United
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Kingdom
decrease
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decreased
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the amount of
carbon
to 160.000. As time goes by to 2005, the issue of
carbon
emmisions
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emissions
has
been
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increased dramatically in
USA
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the USA
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and
China
for
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to
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around 1.500.000. Eventually, Germany
fall
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fell
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slowly to 200.000
while
Canada
and
India
produce a lot more than before for 160.000 and 250.000.
On the other hand
, United Kingdom
stil
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still
hold
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the same number after those years.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
Vocabulary: Replace the words carbon, usa, china, canada, india with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "amount" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • carbon emissions
  • bar graph
  • trends
  • analyze
  • significant changes
  • emission levels
  • steady increase/decrease
  • comparisons
  • summarize
  • range
  • over time
  • environmental impact
  • greenhouse gases
  • sustainable practices
  • fossil fuels
  • industrial activity
  • data interpretation
  • chart analysis
  • megatons
  • climate change
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