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The qualities and skills that people require to be successful in today’s world cannot be learned at university or at other academic institutions. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Nowadays the eminences and skills are required and it is cannot be learned at
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. I totally agree because the workplace is more practical and schools mostly teach
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.
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, the real workplace is more practical in
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 of procedure.
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, the
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 only taught the
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 and lack of practicals.
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, the
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 think it is very superficial.
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, the
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 went to the laboratorium twice
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a year in
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 of examination. It is a very common situation and it happens mostly all around the city.
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, practice is important to raise the skill and ability.
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, the
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 teach the irrelevant
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.
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, the
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 at
school
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 gives an example of the problem.
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,
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theory
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 will never have the same result as
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real life. The internship will be more practical than
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. The
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 will be more skilful if they get real work.
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, an internship costs an arm and leg in
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 of transportation.
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, a student will face a different form of administrative letter at a certain office and it is a different form of letter in
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 of structure and content.
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, the
students
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 will ask their mentor at the office based on the real situation. In conclusion, today being practical and problem solving based on the real situation at the workplace is good to raise the skills of the
students
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 in today's world.
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, forcing the
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 to have real experience is better for their future careers.

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introduction/conclusion
Ensure that your introduction clearly presents your position on the topic and that your conclusion summarizes your main points effectively.
structure
Develop a clear and logical structure for your essay by organizing ideas into distinct paragraphs, each with a clear topic sentence and closing sentence linking to the next paragraph.
examples
Expand your main points with relevant and specific examples to support your arguments and show a deeper understanding of the topic.
task response
Address the prompt fully by discussing both sides of the argument and providing a balanced view before stating your opinion.
coherence
Improve your coherence by using a variety of linking words to connect ideas within and between paragraphs, and ensure that the progression of ideas is smooth and logical.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • critical thinking
  • problem-solving
  • emotional intelligence
  • self-awareness
  • interpersonal skills
  • adaptability
  • resilience
  • networking
  • negotiation
  • time management
  • practical skills
  • real-world experience
  • academic knowledge
  • career advancement
  • foundational understanding
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