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Living in a country where you have to speak a foreign language can case serious social problems, as well as practical problems. to what extent do you agree or disagree with thia statement?

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It is argued whether
inidividals
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individuals
 who live abroad and speak
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language
 face many problems in their daily and social life. To my personal opinion, in
this
 case, knowing
foreign
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language
 will prompt
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you to
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 overcome
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isues
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issues
instead
 of
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causing
 them. Here below, I will expound my point of view
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detailed
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.
Firstly
, being able to learn a
foreing
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foreign
language
 is a clear indication of
clever
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 mind and
consitance
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constant
 discipline.
Moreover
, when individuals dive into
language
 aspects they should face
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certain
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 features, which will
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 them why specific vocabulary is used
to be
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in particular
 situations. In
this
 case,
people
, who learn
new
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a new
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language
 and at the same time live in a country where
this
language
 is native,
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possess
poses
 a great chance to assimilate
quicklier
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quickly
in
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 their new environment.
Also
, the most respectful way to demonstrate own intention to be accepted in a
foreing
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foreign
 society
laid
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 in learning
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 of
this
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these
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people
, particularly their
language
 and traditions.
Thus
,
this
 approach will
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not only
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to avoid
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 many social issues but
also
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to
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foreingners
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foreigners
, allowing
to
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them to
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 make friends with them.
However
, some suggest that being in a new country and speaking
language
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 which is native there may create some practical problems for
people
such
 as different understanding in some situations. Often,
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proponents
 of
this
 idea make
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 about Bulgaria where
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gesture
 'yes' looks like 'no'. But they
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 to take into account that the majority of
such
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 usually
happens
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 with tourists, who are not aware
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of
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 local cultural aspects and do not know
Bulgarian
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the Bulgarian
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language
. In
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practical
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,
people
 who used to live there and learn traditions are not bothered
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by such
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 superficial moments. In conclusion, I strongly believe that living in
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a foreign
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 state and
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speaking
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 in
local
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language
 will greatly facilitate
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any individual who would love to
accomodate
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accommodate
 and
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 part of
this
 new society.
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