The map below is of the town of Garlsdon. A new supermarket (S) is planned for the town. The map shows two possible sites for the supermarket.

The map below is of the town of Garlsdon. A new supermarket (S) is planned for the town. The map shows two possible sites for the supermarket.
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The map shows the infrastructure of Garlsdon town with two possible locations of supermarkets that have been suggested. From an
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perspective, it is readily apparent that the first supermarket would be
placed
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located
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in the countryside
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the other one was planned to be located in a busy area. There are large areas of industries with a few houses at the corner of Garlsdon. In the middle of the city, there is the town centre consisting of many population of about 65.000 people. It is recorded as the busiest area out of all regions. Supermarket soon to be developed in
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middle of town. Fortunately, no traffic congestion happens here
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, there are three ways available for someone who wants to go to several urban areas by passing the countryside.
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, the train provides a destination to Hindon and Cransdon, 12 and 25 km away respectively. Hindon has the largest population around 10.00 residents
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Cransdonis 2 times bigger at 29.000. If someone wants to take their own vehicle, there is
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an alternative way which is the main road to these two towns.
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, Brandon (population 15.000) only has the main road to reach and it is 16 km abroad. In the future, you could find a second supermarket along the street to Hindon.
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  • Accessibility
  • Congestion
  • Economic benefits
  • Environmental impact
  • Foot traffic
  • Green space
  • Job creation
  • Local property values
  • Parking availability
  • Pollution
  • Proximity
  • Public transportation
  • Sustainability
  • Traffic patterns
  • Residential areas
  • Shopping convenience
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