In order to solve traffic problems, the government should tax private car owners heavily use their money to improve public transportation. What are the advantages and disadvantages of such a solution?

Nowadays, traffic
congestions
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have been became
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a significant dilemma in the communities. one of the suggestions for reducing
this
phenomenon is to impose
tax
private
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on private
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car owners to improve public
transportation
by governments. There are pros and cons
about
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this
issue. On
one
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hand, imposing
tax
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a tax
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private
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cars
should reduce the amount of traffic
jam
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.
This
event could help
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the emission gases which produced by private
cars
such
as CO2 ,
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emission gases would raise global warming which has
negative
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impact on the environment. Another benefit of
this
law would be using less fossil fuels which can cause air pollution and
ozone
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the ozone
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layer.
On the other hand
, imposing
tax
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on private
cars
should have its own
dameges
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damages
damage
too. Using private
cars
and public
transportation
must be
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. An example of
this
statetment
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statement
is when plenty of individuals do not use
of
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their own
cars
, they will use public
transportation
that over-crowing would be
result
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the result
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of
this
dession
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decision
session
.
Over- crowding
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has negative effects on psychological and physiological health bodies,
such
as mental
diorders
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disorders
and respiratory problems.
To conclude
, imposing
tax
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a tax
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on private
cars
to reduce the amount of traffic
jam
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jams
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is a
soulution
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solution
which I
exteremly
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extremely
believe that,
goverments
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governments
government
should pay attention
on
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the amount of
decrssing
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decreasing
of private
cars
and increasing of public
transportation's
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transportation
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equipments
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equipment
types of equipment
pieces of equipment
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Ensure you answer both parts of the question equally to provide a balanced discussion of the advantages and disadvantages. This helps in achieving a clear and complete response to the question presented.
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Include specific examples to support each point you make. This helps to clarify your main points and make your argument more persuasive.
coherence cohesion
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coherence cohesion
Use a wider range of sentence structures and vocabulary to increase the precision and variation in your writing.

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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