The diagrams below show the changes that have taken place at West Park Secondary School since its construction in 1950.

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The three maps illustrate the construction of West Park Secondary School from 1950, 1980, and 2010. On the northern

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, the main road remained intact without experiencing any reconstruction until 2010.

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, houses were transformed into car parks, science blocks, and the school's main building in 1980. Those three areas still existed until the year 2010, yet the cark park had been expanded until it reached the southern

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, on the southern

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, the playground was the only one which remained intact.

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, the playground had experienced reconstruction to be smaller in size by 2010.

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this

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side

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, the farthest left was the area with the most changes in the past 60 years. Started with farmland to the sports field and

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became a mixture of a car park and sports field by the year 2010.

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, the housing areas and farmland have been fully taken out and never be seen in 1980 and after.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words side with synonyms.

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Vocabulary: Only 5 basic words for charts were used.

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Vocabulary: The word "remained" was used 2 times.

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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 9.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Introduction & conclusion present

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 9.0

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Task Achievement: 9.0

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158 words

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The diagrams below show the changes that have taken place at West Park Secondary School since its construction in 1950.

Some people think the main purpose of school is to turn children into good citizens and workers, rather than to benefit them as individuals. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Nowadays, more and more older people who are looking for work have to compete with younger people for the same job. What problemes does this came? What are some possibles solutions?

The international community must act immediately to ensure all nations to reduce their consumption of fossil fuels e.g. gas and oil.To what extent do you agree/ disagree?

Despite a large number of gyms , a sedentary lifestyle is gaining popularity in the contemporary world. What problems are associated with this ? What solutions can you suggest?