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Distance learning is becoming a trend in many parts of the world. Write an essay of 250 words to discuss the advantages and disadvantages of this way of learning

With the increasing developments in technology, online learning has been applied in various institutions and gained
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popularity worldwide.
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this
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 phenomenon is rich in knowledge and flexibility for
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, it seems to be
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 of fundamental educational qualities. On the one hand,
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 learning gives
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students
 two main benefits.
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, studying via the Internet provides
students
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 with the chance to access
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a wide range of
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diverse
 knowledge from trustworthy sources. They will not be limited to particular academic theories at school,
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, their creativity in distinctive fields is far
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 than offline
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.
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,
students
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 will not be restrained by time and location, they can actively set up their schedules. To illustrate, children attending cyber schooling are able to organize time for daily activities and can travel anywhere without skipping classes.
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, there are drawbacks
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 the trend. Owing to the shortage in
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, both teachers and learners do not have much face-to-face communication. At
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 point, teachers are incapable of understanding thoroughly about
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 intellectual difficulties. Studying online during the
COVID 19
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 pandemic,
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, many children claimed that they
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couldn't
 acquire
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knowledge
 after each lesson and
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 up failing exams.
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, virtual education may cause isolation
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 reduce the connection between friends. It is obvious that online
students
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 are less close-knit than those who go to traditional schools in some ways. In conclusion, e-learning brings convenience and varied inspiration to children.
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, both schools and learners should take into serious consideration the negative sides of the incident.

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introduction
Ensure that your introduction provides a clear thesis statement that directly addresses the advantages and disadvantages of distance learning.
logical structure
Structure your essay more clearly, using distinct paragraphs for each point and make sure they logically follow from one to the next.
supported main points
Develop your main points by adding more detailed and specific examples to support each advantage and disadvantage. Avoid general statements without clear support.
complete response
Fully address the prompt by discussing more distinct advantages and disadvantages. Ensure each is carefully analyzed, rather than briefly mentioned.
coherence
Use a wider range of linking words and phrases to improve the flow of information and ideas throughout your essay.
clear comprehensive ideas
To enhance task achievement, expand upon the key points with comprehensive arguments, ensuring a deeper exploration of the topic.
relevant specific examples
Incorporate real-world examples or data to make your points stronger and more relatable to the reader.

Your opinion

Don’t put your opinion unless you are asked to give it.

If the question asks what you think, you MUST give your opinion to get a good score.

Don’t leave your opinion until the conclusion.

Here are examples of instructions that require you to give your opinion:

...do you agree or disagree?...do you think...?...your opinion...?

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