The chart below shows the changes that took place in three different areas of crime in Newport city center from 2003-2012.

The chart below shows the changes that took place in three different areas of crime in Newport city center from 2003-2012.
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The line chart illustrates the changes in the
frequency
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of crimes from three different areas in Newport City Centre from 2003 until 2012.
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the drastic fall in car theft incidents,
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still had the most
frequency
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in 2012.
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with, burglary incidents have been occurring a lot since 2003, it even rose and reached its peak in 2004 with over 3500
cases
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.
However
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, it fell until 2012 with less than 1500
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. Next, car theft crimes
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had a similar decrease which started strong in 2003 with over 2500 in numbers before going downhill to below 2500 in 2012. It reached its peak in 2004 and its lowest in 2006 and 2008.
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, the
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of robbery still remained the lowest with over 500 since 2003. It experienced its highest
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in 2005 with almost 1000
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,
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, in 2008 it had its lowest
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with a mere 500
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.
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