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Percentage of national consumer expenditure by category- 2002

#percentage #consumer #expenditure #category-
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data
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percentage
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the percentage
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 of national customer expenditure by three categories in 2002 for five countries.
Overall
, the table shows that the vast majority of the highest
consumers
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 spending percentage is on
the
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food
/drinks/
tobacco
. On the other
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 it looks
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 purchasers are paying out less for
leisure
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education
. In 2002
food
/drinks/
tobacco
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 the greatest rate
for
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 customer expenditure
thus
 means that Turkey is
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 the top of the list
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ranking
32.14
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% , and Ireland the second at 28.91%. Turkey
also
 had the highest percentage of purchaser spending on
leisure
 /
education
 at 4.35%. The most consumer spending in Spain is on
food
/drinks/
tobacco
 at 18.80%.
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laying out the minimum ratio
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leisure
/
education
 at 1.98% Italy and Sweden
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 almost the same proportion
on
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leisure
/
education
 at 3.30% and 3.22% respectively.
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both countries have less than 20% on
food
/drink/
tobacco
, but Italy led the pack on clothing/footwear expenditure at 9% .
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Introduction and Conclusion
Ensure that an introduction clearly presents the overall purpose and content of the data being described, and try to include a conclusion that summarizes the key findings.
Logical Structure
Focus on structuring the essay logically, with clear paragraphing and transitions between ideas to guide the reader through your analysis.
Supported Main Points
Support main points with specific data and comparisons where relevant, to clearly show the relationships between the different categories and countries.
Complete Response
Address all parts of the task, ensuring that information for each category and country is included and clearly described.
Clear and Comprehensive Ideas
Clarify your ideas by using appropriate language to describe trends, comparisons, and percentages without ambiguity.
Relevant Specific Examples
Use relevant examples and data to support your analysis, and aim to include a varied range of sentence structures and vocabulary.

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