The chart below shows the expenditure of two countries on consumer goods in 2010

The chart below shows the expenditure of two countries on consumer goods in 2010
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The bar chart provides statistical reports on the expenditure of consumer goods being spent by France and the
UK
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in 2010.
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, the largest spending in both countries is on cars,
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followed by computers. Perfume has minimum spending on the total expenditures for both countries. The top spending
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expenditure in the
UK
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is cars at $450,000
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and
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followed by books at $400,000.
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the third position, there are cameras at $360,000,
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perfume is
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the lowest spending with total money less than $150,000. On the other side, in France, the highest expenditure is similar to the
UK
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, which is cars at $400,000.
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, computers are in the second position with money being spent at $350,000 which is higher than in the
UK
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, followed by books with total spending at $300,000. The lowest spending on consumer goods in 2010 was perfume and cameras at $200,000 and $150,000 respectively.
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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 71%.
Vocabulary: Replace the words uk with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: Only 2 basic words for charts were used.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • expenditure
  • consumer goods
  • chart
  • countries
  • overall
  • compare
  • analyze
  • categories
  • consumer spending
  • trends
  • proportions
  • statistics
  • increase
  • decrease
  • significant
  • notable
  • remarkable
  • substantial
  • considerable
  • determine
  • conclude
  • in conclusion
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