As a part of their education, individuals should spend a period of time living or working in another country. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

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People have to spend some of their time
to live
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or
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in other countries as part of their education.
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essay attempts to shed
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light
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the merits and demerits of
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educational journey before concluding that the abroad experience is important to
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perspective. Regarding
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staying or working in other regions for specific
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, occasionally
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way will
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help students to gain insightful knowledge and skills. First and foremost,
individual
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that
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who
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living
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abroad will learn
new
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about new
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culture
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cultures
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. The different
culture
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will lead them to not only learn about their course but
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help them to learn about new
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language
or practice.
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, studying in different countries can develop
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circle.
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that,
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will give benefits for the person to extend their relationships or even their business to
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.
On the other hand
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, leaving their home country might give them several disadvantages.
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, they will be far from their family and friends.
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means that
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international
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an international
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student
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students
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might experience
home sick
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.
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, a different culture, weather, and
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can lead to depression
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of too many new things to adapt
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All in all, even though living abroad seems hard to manage,
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the benefits of it defeat its drawbacks. By living in other countries,
student
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students
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will gain
unique
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point of view and soft skills to adapt
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new challenges. I would be content with the agreement of having an experience living in other nations.
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