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Writing Samples
Band 8

There is a new company inviting applications for vacancies. Write an application letter. You should: - explain why you are writing the letter - list your capabilities and qualifications - point out what time you are available

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Dear Sir/Madam, My name is Tajinder Singh, and I am writing
this
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 letter to express my interest in the job opportunity at your company for the post of manager that was recently posted on the company website. To commence
with
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apply
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, I graduated from Lambton College, Sarnia in 2017 with a one-year internship program. At present, I am employed as an assistant manager at a renowned food packaging firm in my locality. Being a part of the food industry, I learned many skills from them,
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 as planning and coordinating different processes to meet the deadlines of the project. Apart from that, I am used to working at a fast pace to finish the project. If you find my skills and experience appropriate, please contact me. We can schedule a meeting on weekdays after 2 pm and
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 on weekends between 1 pm and 5 pm. Thank you for your time and consideration. Yours faithfully, Tajinder Singh

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Coherence & Cohesion
Ensure that each paragraph focuses on a single thought or aspect. While your letter is structured well, the second paragraph could be split to individually focus on qualifications and current responsibilities for improved clarity.
Coherence & Cohesion
A strong logical flow is present in your letter, but you can further enhance coherence by using a wider range of cohesive devices and transition words when moving from one idea to the next.
Task Achievement
Your greeting and closing are appropriate and polite, befitting the formal tone of an application letter.
Task Achievement
You've given a satisfactory and complete response to the task, listing your qualifications and availability effectively.
Task Achievement
To further strengthen your letter, you may provide specific examples of achievements or responsibilities in your current job that showcase your capabilities relevant to the new role you are applying for.
Task Achievement
Consider being more explicit about how your skills align with the requirements of the new role. Relating your experience directly to the job description can make your application stand out.
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