You recently received a letter from a friend asking for your advice on whether to go to college or to try to get a job. You think he/ she should get a job. Write a letter to this friend. In your letter: say why she will not enjoy going to college explain why getting a job is a good idea Suggest the type of job that would be suitable.

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Dear Jay, Hope you are doing well. It's been a long time
we
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since we
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met. I am writing
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letter in response to your mail, which
i
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got
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week.
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me, you should prefer to go with
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job
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a job
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,
instead
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of completing college. Let me explain the scenario.
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going
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though going
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to college has many benefits, it takes a huge amount of money
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fees. Nowadays, colleges are doing business to earn money, if you go there,
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you
wont
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won't
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get that level of education, which you deserve. Ergo,
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prefer you to go with
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job
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. If you start a
job
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as a Call
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agent, you will upgrade your communication skills,
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advancing in Excel sheets. If you continue with
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jo
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job
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for
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more
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than 2 years,
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there are high chances to receive a higher post like
manager
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a manager
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. The
pay- cheque
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is good enough for doing household
as well as
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personal chores. You can enter the real world and can change a lot
withing
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within
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few
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a few
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years after getting in a
job
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. It would be great if you do
this
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job
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. I
also
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got to know that many students who are in college are blaming themselves for
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decision.
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,
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doing
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job
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the job
a job
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you can earn money and can
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make your own group. I'll be coming to your hometown
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apply
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next week, so we can discuss
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further
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this further
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in
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. Thanks for your consideration Yours Faithfully Jay Chawla
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coherence cohesion
Ensure that your letter has a clear introduction, body, and conclusion. Make use of paragraphs to organize your ideas effectively and use linking words to create better cohesion.
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Make sure to address all parts of the task equally and develop each point fully for a complete response. Include a short introduction and conclusion to frame your letter.
coherence cohesion
Use a variety of sentence structures and vocabulary to make your writing more interesting and to better demonstrate your language ability.
task achievement
Avoid informal language for a semi-formal or formal task such as writing a letter for advice. Maintain a consistent and appropriate tone throughout your correspondence.
coherence cohesion
Check for grammatical errors and correct them for a more coherent and professional impression.
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Suggest specific examples or detailed reasons to support your advice which can make your suggestions more convincing and relevant to the reader.

The Closing

The style of the letter determine how you have to close it.

Check out the suggested closing sentences for each type of letter in the General IELTS Test. The closing sentence should be the last sentence of your letter.

Formal style (To someone you have not met, whose name you don’t know)

  • Yours faithfully,

Semi-formal (To someone you may or may not have met, whose last name you know)

  • Yours sincerely,

Informal (To someone you know well, whose first name you know and use)

  • Best regards,
  • Warm wishes,

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • academic pressures
  • financial burdens
  • tuition
  • student loans
  • uncertainty
  • work experience
  • earn money
  • practical skills
  • professional network
  • align with interests
  • growth opportunities
  • on-the-job training
  • apprenticeships
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