The graph below shows the different modes of transport used to travel to and from work in one European city in 1960, 1980 and 2000.

The graph below shows the different modes of transport used to travel to and from work in one European city in 1960, 1980 and 2000.
The
data
illustrates different types of ways
which
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in which
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people
in one European city selected for going to work or travel in 1960, 1980 and 2000 respectively. The
data
illustrates 4 different transport: Bus,
Car
, Bike and
Foot
values that
people
selected for going to work or travel.
Overall
, each year has different frequently used transport. The highest
data
was "
Car
" in 2000 and the lowest was
also
"
Car
" and "Bike".
First,
the majority of
people
used "
Car
" and "
Foot
". In 2000, the date of "
Car
" rated over 35 and it is more than 5 times of 1980's "
Car
" graph. The "
Foot
" in 1960 indicates accurately 35 and
this
is the highest bar involved in the "
Foot
" article.
Next,
there are two bars which had the lowest
data
overall
. The "
Car
" in 1960 had more than 5 but lower than 10.
Moreover
, it recorded the lowest among the three years.
As well as
this
value, the 2000's "Bike" had exactly the same graph which is over 5.
Lastly
, in 1980, "Bus" appeared
the
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as the
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most popular way that
people
were transported which is over 25 and "
Foot
" was the lowest transport which was less than 20.
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