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Do you believe that human empathy is declining in the digital age?

#empathy #age
Decling
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Decreasing
 human empathy has become an integral part of the rising debate in the present world.
While
 proponents of the argument are in favour,
however
, the
oponents
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opponents
 are completely
agaist
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against
 the relevance of
decling
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declining
 human empathy. In my opinion, human empathy has more positive impacts than negative around the globe. To commence with, there are a lot of arguments in favour of my belief. The most prominent one is that
people
 are making more donations than ever before.
According to
 the
researach
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research
 conducted by Western Sydney University, online money
donation
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donations
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 has increased
becasue
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because
 of advancing technology.
Secondly
, because of
digital
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the digital
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 age
people
 are getting to know more about
people
 who need money.
On the other hand
, critics may point out that one of the most significant disadvantages is online video platforms which are causing
people
 to forget the
people
 in need.
For instance
, A survey conducted by the United States reveals that
people
 are wasting about five hours daily
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 video platforms.
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Task Achievement
Ensure that both perspectives (for and against declining human empathy) are explored with adequate depth. Balance the arguments to fully address the prompt.
Coherence and Cohesion
Develop clear topic sentences at the beginning of each paragraph to guide the reader through your arguments.
Task Achievement
Include specific examples, data, or evidence to support each of your main points, thereby strengthening your argument.
Coherence and Cohesion
Work on writing a clear conclusion that summarizes your main points and restates your position, providing closure to your essay.

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    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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