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Influence of human beings on the world's ecosystem is leading to the extinction of species and loss of bio- diversity. What are the primary causes of loss of bio- diversity? What solutions can you suggest?

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Structure
Your essay lacks a clear structure. It's important to have an introduction that presents the topic, body paragraphs that discuss points with examples, and a conclusion that summarizes your ideas. Try to organize your ideas into a logical format with clear paragraphing.
Task Response
The essay should directly address the question prompt. Make sure to discuss the causes of biodiversity loss and provide specific solutions, as the prompt requests.
Coherence
To enhance coherence, use linking words to connect sentences and paragraphs. This will help the reader follow your argument more easily.
Accuracy
Check your spelling, grammar, and punctuation carefully. Incorrect language use can make your essay difficult to understand and detract from its overall quality.
Relevance
It's critical to stay on topic and provide relevant examples. Each paragraph should have a main idea that ties back to the question prompt.

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To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

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