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You arranged to visit a friend in Canada but an important event at home now means that you must change the dates of the visit Write a letter to your friend. In your letter • exain the important event • apolgise for the situation • suggest a new arrangment

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Dear Charli I am addressing to you asking for to
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 important matters. I am going to hospitality and news came from the office me. On the news in foreign are came to writing colleague so we need to signature contract.
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 signed a charter for business development so today is let off journey. I am to asking for to
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apologise
 situation, as I am not
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. What can I do to make you forgive me
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 I want to tell you a new daily routine,
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 will prepare for a day and tell me that date, by which time I will finish my work. Yours Sincerely Rakhimbek Toshturdiyev
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task achievement
To improve task achievement, ensure that you fully detail the nature of the important event that requires the change of visit dates, as this provides context and justifies the situation, making your writing more compelling and complete.
task achievement
A more sincere and clearer apology is necessary to properly convey regret and to adhere to a suitable writing tone.
coherence cohesion
To improve upon the logical structure, make sure the progression of ideas and explanations in your letter is clear, following a logical sequence from introduction to conclusion.
coherence cohesion
For a better greeting and closing, use more appropriate phrases that suit the semi-formal tone of a letter to a friend, like 'Dear Charlie' at the beginning and 'Warm regards' or 'Best wishes' to close the letter.
coherence cohesion
Each paragraph should focus on one main idea, such as the reason for the date change, the apology, and suggesting the new arrangement consecutively.

Word Count

IELTS says that you should write a minimum of 150 words in writing task 1. If you go under word count you will lose marks in task response.

A very long letter will not give you a higher band score.

Aim for between 160 to 190 words in writing task 1. This will ensure a concise letter and will be realistic in terms of time management. You have only 20 minutes to write the letter and you need around 5 minutes of planning time, so you will not be able to write a long letter in 15 minutes.

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