Some people believe that is important to give gifts to friends and family to show that we care about them. Others think that there are better ways to show that we care Discuss both views and give your opinion.
In my
country
many Add a comma
country,
people
think that it is important to give a lot of gifts
to close friends and lovely family to demonstrate that we look after about
them. Some Change preposition
apply
people
think that there are better ways to show
that we care
.
On the one
hand, I belive
that many Correct your spelling
believe
people
think it is the best way to give gifts
to close friends family and familiars to show
that we care
about them. Actually giving gifts
means that people
are sincere to each other.If a person gives a gift
to a loved one
, that person will be happy and will know your kindness. TO EXPLAIN,
you got a gift
for your mother.Your mother was very glad, so she knows that you are close to her. AS A RESULT
, you will be the best child for your mother.FOR EXAMPLE
, I got my dad a father's
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Father's
day
Capitalize word
Day
gift
last
year and he was happy for me, took
my present.
Correct word choice
and took
One
the other hand,it's Correct your spelling
On
commanly
argued Correct your spelling
commonly
some
Change preposition
by some
group
of Fix the agreement mistake
groups
people
these only not reason
why we Change the determiner
this only not reason
these only not reasons
gift
to show
kindness, of course, there are other reasons. You do not to
give Add a missing verb
have to
gifts
to show
kindness.You can always tell them you love and help them with their work. TO EXPLAIN, as a gift
, you can help your loved one
in daily work, cheer up and worry. AS ARESULT
, you will Correct your spelling
A RESULT
plese
him and make feel him that you like him. Correct your spelling
please
FOR EXAMPLE
,
I tell my loved ones that, I love them and that I care
. I will be more please
. Add a comma
, please
Then
their spirits will rise.Therefore
, you get along with
your loved ones.
IN CONCLUSION, many people
think that it is important to give gifts
to close friends and lovely family to show
that we care
about them. Some people
think that there are better ways to show
that we look after them. Both of them people
will be happySubmitted by soglomovsarvar on
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