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You arranged to visit a friend in Canada but an important event at home now means that you must change the dates of the visit. Write a letter to your friend. In your letter • explain the important event • apologise for the situation • suggest a new arrangement

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Dear David, David, it's been a long time since I've seen you. I want to see you and I eagerly wait to
meeting
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meet

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 you. I am looking forward to
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 meeting, but I have an important meeting at my office that day.
This
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 is very important to me and the office because we
coperate
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cooperate

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with other
campains
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campaigns

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.
As a result
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, our office will be bigger. If
this
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 meeting is great, my place will come up. I know it is
disrespectly
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disrespectful

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. I'm sorry about that. David, I hope you understand me. And I promise it won't happen again. I will ensure
next
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the next

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 meetings will be in the meantime.
Due to
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 the
cancelltion
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cancellation

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of the meeting, I suggest a new meeting. If you want, I will
vist
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visit

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you
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your

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 home or meeting on
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a restarant

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restarant
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restaurant

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.I think you will choose your slave. You can choose to cut off the important time. Because I have a lot of free time
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 week. I await your reply and I think the description will be great despite the confusion. All the best, Siroj

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coherence cohesion
Begin by addressing the recipient properly. Use phrases like \
coherence cohesion
Ensure each paragraph presents a clear and distinct idea. It seems that apologies and suggestions are mixed together in your paragraphs.
coherence cohesion
Work on the logical flow of your letter. Transition smoothly from your explanation to your apology, and then to your suggestion for new arrangements.
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Consider using more varied and accurate sentence structures. There were some grammatical errors and awkward expressions.
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Apologize more clearly and sincerely. Also, when suggesting new arrangements, offer specific alternative dates.
coherence cohesion
Close your letter with a suitable sign-off such as 'Kind regards' or 'Sincerely,' followed by your name.
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