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The diagram below shows the development of cutting tools in the Stone Age. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The diagram below shows the development of cutting tools in the Stone Age. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
The diagrams provide information concerning the transformation of cutting equipment between 1.4 and 0.8 million years ago.
Overall
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, it can be clearly seen that both tools A and
B
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 were based on a triangle shape but their size was noticeably developed over the time period.
To begin
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 the appearance of
tool
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 A was about 10
centimetres
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 in height, 5
centimetres
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 in width and 2.5
centimetres
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 in thickness. the material of
tool
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 A was slightly darker than
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tool
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Tool
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B
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. In terms of their characteristic, apparatus
B
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 has more shine than
apparatus
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Apparatus
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 A. Moving on to the external looks of
Tool
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B
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, there was
dramatically increased
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a dramatic increase
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 in terms of width, and it reached around 8
centimetres
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. The measurement of height and thickness remained almost the same level
especially
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, especially
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 in the former. The latter was significantly thinner than
tool
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 A. In terms of material, equipment
B
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 was made by substance with more brighter shade than equipment A.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words b, tool, centimetres with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Stone Age
  • tools
  • cutting
  • development
  • rudimentary
  • sophisticated
  • progression
  • unworked pebbles
  • flake tools
  • bifacial tools
  • efficiency
  • materials
  • emergence
  • characteristics
  • functionality
  • craftsmanship
  • precision
  • hunting
  • carving
  • advancements
  • significance
  • human development
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