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The chart bellow shows the value of one country's exports in various categories during 2015 and 2016. The table shows the percentage change in each category of exports in 2016 compared with 2015. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart bellow shows the value of one country's exports in various categories during 2015 and 2016. The table shows the percentage change in each category of exports in 2016 compared with 2015. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The chart denotes the manifold categories about the
value
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 of exports in one country
throughtout
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throughout
 2015 and 2016, and the table
ilustrates
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illustrates
 the change of
percentage
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 in in each
exports's
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exports
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 category in 2016 compared with 2015.
Overall
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, it was clear that the most exported in 2015 and 2016
was
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were
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petroleum
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products
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.
In addition
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, only gems and jewellery experienced a slump
of
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in
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percentage
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.
Petroleum
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products
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has become
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 the highest
value
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 in 2015
as well as
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 2016 with the
value
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 of export earnings around $60
billions
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billion
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.
Whereas
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,
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apply
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 the
value
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 of other
products
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 namely engineered, gems and jewellery, agriculture, and
textile
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textiles
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 was
more little
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less
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 than
petroleum
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, and the most little exporting earnings
was
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were
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 textiles in 2015 with $25
billions
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billion
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. Gems and jewellery become the only
one
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ones
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that
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whose
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percentage
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 change in values degenerated with
the
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a
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percentage
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 of 5.18%.
While
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, textiles experienced the highest rise
that
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which
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 was 15.24%, and the lowest increase was
petroleum
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products
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 with 3 per cent.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words value, percentage, petroleum, products with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "change" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 4 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Exports
  • Categories
  • Percentage change
  • Trend
  • Growth
  • Decline
  • Comparative analysis
  • Fluctuations
  • Overall performance
  • Sector
  • Year-on-year comparison
  • Trade figures
  • Economic indicator
  • Market dynamics
  • Infographics interpretation
  • Statistical representation
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