In order to study at universities students are required to pay expensive tuition fees. Not all of the students can afford them so some people think that university education should be free for everyone. To what extend do you agree or disagree?

In the present day, tuition
fees
has
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become one of the most important
thing
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things
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at
university
. Despite having
scholarship
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scholarships
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,
student
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students
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still need to pay for the facilities and other extra
payment
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payments
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for
the
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apply
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education
. It is disagree that not all of the students can afford them so some people think that
university
education
should be free for everyone. Analysing two sides of the coin about the
tution
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tuition
fees
will prove
this
. On the one hand, many
university
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universities
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has
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have
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been built
include
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to include
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a
lot
of convenient services so the
fees
can
slightly
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increased.
For instance
, free water
pond
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,
school's
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school
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bus
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buses
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and air
conditioner
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conditioners
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are three of the
most thing
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things
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that
has
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have
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been popular around the
school
enviroment
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environment
. In order to get with that,
student
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students
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required
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are required
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to pay some extra money for the services every
months
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month
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,
sometime
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it is annually for some
university
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universities
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.
Although
the convenient it
made
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, a
lot
of students can not handle that large amount of
fees
so they
accepted
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to get through that by having their own bottle of water and
go
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to
school
by
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foot.
On the other hand
, free
education
for everyone can be a big issue for the
gorvernment
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government
.
For example
, they can not control the amount of
student
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students
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who comes
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comes
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coming
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in every year and
having
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have
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some trouble with the
education
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educational
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enviroment
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environment
. The problem is,
most
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that most
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of them can not handle the amount of money they need to
spent
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every month so the
university
can not
survival
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without
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the gorvernment's
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gorvernment's
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government's
support. Nowadays, there are a
lot
of
university
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universities
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avalible
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available
in Vietnam so if
the
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apply
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education
is free,
GDP
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the GDP
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of Vietnam will
be declined
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decline
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some time in the future, which bring to us a
lot
of trouble for the living standards
for
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of
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city dwellers. In a nutshell, if the
student
can not afford tuition
fees
, the
school
should have
a
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an
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idea to have them out like
scholarship
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a scholarship
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in order to help them get through the money issue. In the future, they should decrease the services currently
having
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have
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out there and just keep what
really
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is really
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special,
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and usefull
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usefull
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useful
for students to make the
fees
become
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easier to handle.
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  • equal opportunities
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  • educated workforce
  • innovation
  • productivity
  • tax revenues
  • devaluation of degrees
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  • higher taxes
  • essential services
  • perceived value
  • motivation
  • financial stake
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