Some people think that it is important to have a single language as an official international language. Others think that it will make difficult to identify countries and cause a loss of culture. What are your opinions on this?
It is true that international
language
is vital that everybody know
. Many Change the verb form
knows
humans
consider that it is significant to have an individual linguistic as conventional
international word. Another believes that it will cause Add an article
a conventional
the conventional
hard to recognize
states and Add a hyphen
hard-to-recognize
makes
a loss of culture. In my Verb problem
cause
opinion
minority Add a comma
opinion,
language
should hand
down as a rich heritage of dwellers.
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be handed
Firstly
, many countries speak types
of languages especially Correct word choice
different types
minority
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among minority
of
groups in the surrounding cities. Since Change preposition
apply
official
international Correct article usage
the official
language
is English throughout the world and
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apply
people
learn as second linguistic. For example
, if humans
want to communicate with other
between towns, they should know to speak English Correct pronoun usage
others
language
or they
know Correct pronoun usage
apply
official
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the official
language
on
there. Another Change preposition
apply
significand
factor is various Correct your spelling
significant
people
recognition in societies which they live. Because, when Change noun form
people's
every body
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everybody
speak
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speaks
single
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a single
language
, they could not
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cannot
true
separate a diversified culture. Change the word
truly
For instance
, people
like to travel in
the world and Change preposition
around
they
meet up with local Correct pronoun usage
apply
humans
, and they can discriminate another
nation.
It is true that Change preposition
against another
humans
should speak individual language
throughout the world Fix the agreement mistake
languages
which
they can keep in touch with each other. Despite Correct word choice
so that
this
, it seems that if people
only speak single
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a single
linguistic
, they Replace the word
language
could not
separate Wrong verb form
cannot
another
from other countries and Correct quantifier usage
apply
also
it leads to loss
of culture.
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the loss
To conclude
, it seems to me that humans
should preserve of generation because old people
convey national heritage and they hand down official
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the official
language
thus
Young people
have to maintain as
a rich inheritance. So, Change preposition
apply
people
should recognize other communities based on Correct article usage
the linguistic
linguistic
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linguistics
which
they live in Change preposition
in which
district
.Add an article
the district
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