You should write at least 150 words. Chorleywood is a village near London whose population has increased steadily since the middle of the 19th century. The map below shows the development of the village.

You should write at least 150 words.

Chorleywood is a village near London whose population has increased steadily since the middle of the 19th century. The map below shows the development of the village.
The
map
above illustrates the
development
of the village called “Chorleywood”, located near London from 1868 to 1994. The legends below the
map
infer the
development
of different years
,
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and the type of
roads
constructed.
First,
Chorleywood has developed based on their construction of the transportation routes.
According to
the
map
above, the motorway, built in 1970, intersects the main
roads
below the Chorelywood Park and golf course.
Moreover
, another railway was built at the right side of the park in 1909, which intersects both main
roads
and
motorway
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.
Next,
based on the
map
, the legends show the
development
of the village which
is surrounding
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the
roads
and railways. From 1868 to 1883, a small area between the left main road and the park was developed, and from 1883 to 1922, a larger area was
then
developed below the previous
development
.
However
, during that time,
while
the railway was built in 1909, Chorleywood Station
also
appeared.
In addition
, from 1922 to 1970, different areas were developed below the railway, forming a V-shape.
Finally
, a significant amount of
lands
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had made
their
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progress at the upper side of the main road and
North
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the North
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and East
side
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of the motorway.
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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Vocabulary: Replace the words map, development, roads with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: Only 5 basic words for charts were used.
Vocabulary: The word "map" was used 4 times.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Steadily
  • Pivotal events
  • Significant change
  • Transportation links
  • Commuter village
  • Residential areas
  • Commercial areas
  • Public facilities
  • Infrastructure
  • Environmental impact
  • Community life
  • Conservation efforts
  • Maintaining character
  • Vicinity
  • Unique aspects
  • Common challenges
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