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You should Chorleywood is a village near London whose population has increased steadily since the middle of the 19th century. The map below shows the development of the village.

You should Chorleywood is a village near London whose population has increased steadily since the middle of the 19th century. The map below shows the development of the village.
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The
map
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 above illustrates the
development
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 of the village called “Chorleywood”, located near London from 1868 to 1994. The legends below the
map
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 infer the
development
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 of different years
,
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 and the type of
roads
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 constructed.
First,
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Chorleywood has developed based on their construction of the transportation routes.
According to
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 the
map
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 above, the motorway, built in 1970, intersects the main
roads
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 below the Chorelywood Park and golf course.
Moreover
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, another railway was built at the right side of the park in 1909, which intersects both main
roads
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 and
motorway
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.
Next,
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based on the
map
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, the legends show the
development
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 of the village which
is surrounding
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 the
roads
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 and railways. From 1868 to 1883, a small area between the left main road and the park was developed, and from 1883 to 1922, a larger area was
then
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 developed below the previous
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.
However
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, during that time,
while
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 the railway was built in 1909, Chorleywood Station
also
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 appeared.
In addition
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, from 1922 to 1970, different areas were developed below the railway, forming a V-shape.
Finally
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, a significant amount of
lands
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land
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 had made
their
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progress at the upper side of the main road and
North
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the North
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 and East
side
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sides
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 of the motorway.

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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Vocabulary: Replace the words map, development, roads with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Only 5 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "map" was used 4 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Steadily
  • Pivotal events
  • Significant change
  • Transportation links
  • Commuter village
  • Residential areas
  • Commercial areas
  • Public facilities
  • Infrastructure
  • Environmental impact
  • Community life
  • Conservation efforts
  • Maintaining character
  • Vicinity
  • Unique aspects
  • Common challenges
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