The table give information about salaries of secondary/high school teachers in five countries in 2009.

The table give information about salaries of secondary/high school teachers in five countries in 2009.
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The diagram illustrates the data about the salary development of secondary
teachers’
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and the duration in five countries in 2009.
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, it can be seen that Luxembourg had by far the highest rate, and the longest time to reach the maximum number was Korea. Luxembourg came in first in terms of number,
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30
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to gain $59 thousand, and 15
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after the starting point, it reached $112 thousand. Teachers’ wages in Korea and Japan show a similar number at
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and it took around 35
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for them to experience a significant rise. Meanwhile, the fee improvements in Australia and Denmark were considerably lower than in other countries,at under $10 thousand.
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, the level of educators’ payroll in Denmark
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only higher than Australia but
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has the shortest term compared with other states. When it comes to the term, they need approximately 10
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to arrive at their maximum numbers.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words years with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "reach" was used 2 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • secondary/high school teachers
  • annual salary
  • gross income
  • net salary
  • cost of living
  • education funding
  • gender pay gap
  • teaching hours
  • years of experience
  • additional qualifications
  • economic indicators
  • average wage
  • currency conversion
  • educational disparities
  • international comparison
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