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You have had a problem with your nest-door neighbour. You have not been able to speak to your neighbour about this. Write a letter to this neighbour in your letter * Explain the problem * Suggest a solution * Say what action you will take if the situation does not improve

#nest-door #neighbour #action #situation
Dear Sir or Madam I am writing to express my dissatisfaction because
,
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i
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I
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 have not been able to speak to you about loud noises that cause
i
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me
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 discomfort. I have been living here for five years and always
at the end
 of the week,
i
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I
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 prefer
rest
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to rest
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 off because
every
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normal
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 get tired and want to rest
in
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at
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 the weekends.
However
, there
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 no peace in my life since you moved into
this
 apartment.
For
this
 reason, during the day I become
exhaust
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 and irritable. It will be
cause
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a cause
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 major problems in my health and career in
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nearest
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 future.
Also
,
this
 complaint is not only from me, but our
neighbors
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neighbours
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 are
also
 angry about
this
 situation. You should pay attention to
this
 complaint. I am afraid that will not become
argument
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.
That is
 why, I have a suggestion. you should move to the yard. I
sure
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, it would be good for everyone. I look forward to your reply and resolution to our problem. Your
sinceraly
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sincerely
 Jurabek
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Coherence & Cohesion
Ensure that each paragraph has a clear main idea and purpose. The body paragraphs should each address a specific aspect of the task, such as explaining the problem, suggesting a solution, and stating the actions you will take.
Coherence & Cohesion
Work on developing a logical structure that guides the reader through the letter. Use connective words and phrases to link sentences and paragraphs together more clearly.
Coherence & Cohesion
Ensure the greeting and sign-off are consistent with the formal tone required for this task. Using 'Dear Sir or Madam' is appropriate, and signing off with 'Yours sincerely' is correct, but make sure to capitalize 'Sincerely'.
Task Achievement
Fully and directly answer all parts of the task, ensuring that the problem is clearly explained, a viable solution is proposed, and the consequences of inaction are outlined. While the letter includes these elements, they can be expanded upon for clarity and emphasis.
Task Achievement
Maintain a polite and formal tone throughout the letter. Avoid any language that may come across as confrontational or overly casual for this situation.

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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