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The pie chart shows the main migration reasons to and from the United Kingdom in 2007.  Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The pie chart shows the main migration reasons to and from the United Kingdom in 2007.  Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
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The pie chart provides information about the percentage of the UK’s
immigration
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 and
emigration
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 in 2007 based on its factors. From its numbers, it could be said that the major cause of two types of international resident movements is a definite job. Working permanently becomes the hugest reason both for
immigrants
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 and
immigrants
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 with almost a third of a thousand. Other
reasons
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 are finding a job and studying officially in
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 educational institution, where a former factor is more stated by emigrants than
immigrants
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, with
ten
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percent
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 in difference, and
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conversely
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 the latter factor is greater in
immigration
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 than
emigration
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 with a far gap
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 per cent compared with four
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percent
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.
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, emigrants in the UK tend to hide their
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. The numbers are double if compared with
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, eighteen
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percent
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 and six
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percent
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. And for a company
as well as
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reasons
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, both of them are less than sixteen
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percent
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per cent
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, proven by fifteen
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percent
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per cent
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 and eleven
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percent
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per cent
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 for
immigration
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, and
also
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 thirteen
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percent
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per cent
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 and fourteen
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percent
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 for
emigration
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. In summary, a definite job had the greatest percentage both in
immigration
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 and
emigration
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, and the other
reasons
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 are slightly diverse in percentage.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words immigration, emigration, immigrants, reasons, percent with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "compared" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 3 times.
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