WRITING TASK 2 You should spend about 40 minutes on this task. Write about the following topic: Nowadays the way many people interact with each other has changed because of technology. in what ways has technology affected the types of relationships people make? Has this become a positive or negative development?
Present days, the types of communication among
people
Use synonyms
has
differed Change the verb form
have
due to
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development
of Correct article usage
the development
technology
. Use synonyms
This
may help to improve Linking Words
bonding
of relationships Correct article usage
the bonding
as well as
create new Linking Words
family
with Fix the agreement mistake
families
a
different Correct article usage
apply
people
. Use synonyms
However
, arising issues seem to Linking Words
be
loom over Unnecessary verb
apply
this
prospect, Which will be discussed below and I will offer my views.
Taking Linking Words
the
closer look at the positive side, Correct article usage
a
people
can easily communicate with Use synonyms
long distance
relations via fast Add a hyphen
long-distance
technology
like Facebook, Use synonyms
viber
, and WhatsApp. Change the capitalization
Viber
Therefore
, they can learn different cultures and customs Linking Words
with
different Change preposition
from
people
. Use synonyms
For example
, in Linking Words
sophisticated
world, Add an article
a sophisticated
people
communicate with other native Use synonyms
people
via online apps. Use synonyms
This
may help to create strong Linking Words
friendship
among them. Fix the agreement mistake
friendships
Thus
, they can improve their knowledge about other Linking Words
people
.
On the flip side, the Use synonyms
technology
has influenced humans professional life. Use synonyms
For instance
, the modes of communication affected Linking Words
for
workers bonding with others like staff and bosses. If interviews or presentations Change preposition
apply
happened
in Wrong verb form
happen
zoom
, they can not express their emotions Capitalize word
Zoom
with
others. Change preposition
to
This
will affect their professional career Linking Words
as well as
reduce their confidence in themselves. Linking Words
Overall
, improvement of Linking Words
technology
gone wrong side.
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To conclude
, Linking Words
the
most Correct article usage
apply
of
Change preposition
apply
the
Correct article usage
apply
people
have Use synonyms
impacted
by Add a missing verb
been impacted
technology
Use synonyms
with
diverse ways. Despite the cons, the advantages of Change preposition
in
technology
Use synonyms
trumps
the disadvantages in a milestone.Change the verb form
trump
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Introduction and Conclusion
Make sure to include a clear introduction and conclusion. You mentioned your views would be discussed but did not explicitly state them in the introduction or conclusion.
Logical Structure
Organize ideas more logically; group similar ideas together and ensure that paragraphs flow smoothly into one another.
Supported Main Points
Support your main points with specific examples. The use of generic terms like 'sophisticated world' lacks detail - consider providing a real-world example to illustrate your point.
Task Completion
Address the task more completely by giving equal discussion to both sides of the argument. The question asks for the impact of technology on relationships, as well as whether it's a positive or negative development - both should be covered with balanced viewpoints.
Clear Comprehensive Ideas
Develop your ideas more comprehensively. While you've touched on the topic, explore the 'why' and 'how' more deeply to show a clear understanding of the issue at hand.
Relevant Specific Examples
Use more relevant and specific examples to support your arguments. Instead of abstract examples, describe concrete situations or studies that illustrate how technology has impacted relationships.
Answer the 'Problem and Solution' topic
Problem-and-solution essays fall naturally into two parts, the first describing and exploring the problem, the second setting out the solution or solutions.
You essay structure should look something like this:
- Introduction
- Body paragraph 1 – Problems
- Body paragraph 2 – Solutions
- Conclusion
Examples to start your body paragraph:
- One of the first problems of the...
- Another problem that needs to be considered...
- A possible solution to this problem would be...
- One immediate practical solution is to...