In some countries, the average weight of people is increasing, and their level of health and fitness is decreasing. What do you think are the causes of these problems and what measures could be taken to solve them?
In recent decades, the
numbers
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number
obesity
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obese
people
have increased. This
results in deteriorating levels of their overall
health and fitness. One of the plausible reason
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reasons
of
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for
this
situation is due to
their lack of physical Change preposition
apply
activities
. To solve Fix the agreement mistake
activity
this
problem, we need a comprehensive approach including provides
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providing
supportive
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a supportive
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essay will further
discuss about
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this
current issue.
On the one hand, the development of transportations
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transportation
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cars
motorcycle
has Fix the agreement mistake
motorcycles
been
made Unnecessary verb
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people
's lives so much easier. On the other hand
, it reduces people
's walking activities which can help prevent obesity
. For instance
, the
recent study shows that Correct article usage
a
people
who walks
more than 3 kilometers a day lower the likelihood of Change the verb form
walk
obtain
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becoming
obesity
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obese
This
might be the reason why the current generations'
weight Change noun form
generation's
are
increasing.
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is
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, people
does
not like to do physical activities because they can not find the right place. Change the verb form
do
For example
, the study in Jakarta tells that after the construction of The City Park is done, there are many people
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some simple sports Correct pronoun usage
who do
such
as badminton and jogging there. Therefore
, the government should build more supportive places in order to increase the physical activity rates among population
.
In conclusion, one of the causes of Add an article
the population
obesity
is the decline of
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in
people
's physical activity rate. The government can solve this
problem by build
more sports centres. Change the verb form
building
However
, to gain a consistent healthy lifestyle, people
should be motivated by themselves.Submitted by farrandyerza on
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