In a number of counties, some people think it is necessary to spend large sums of money on constructing new railway lines for very fast trains between cities. Others believe the money should be spent on improving existing public transport.
It is thought that
,
more higher amount of Remove the comma
apply
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the country
country
budget should be invested Change noun form
country's
on
building new railways for fast trains Change preposition
in
while
other
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others
are believed
that Wrong verb form
believe
this
money should be spent on inhuncing
current public transport. As far as I am concerned, repairing sometimes costs much Correct your spelling
improving
effort
and money than Correct quantifier usage
more effort
constracting
new ones. Correct your spelling
constructing
contracting
more
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Moreover
over
fast trains are Change preposition
apply
so
beneficial to Rephrase
more
public
than others. Add an article
the public
This
essay will be argued
both views.
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argue
one
hand, fast trains are much time Correct article usage
the one
consuming
rather than Verb problem
time-consuming
other type
of transport and Change the wording
another type
other types
it
can help people be more punctual Correct pronoun usage
they
especially
in big crowded cities. Add the comma(s)
, especially
In addition
, individuals can be avoided
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avoid
of
traffic jams which can result in air pollution Change preposition
apply
due to
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the considerably
considerably
number of cars on Change the word
considerable
routs
and ways. Correct your spelling
routes
For instance
, numerous studies by scholars showed that four wheel
transportation, either personal car or even bus Add a hyphen
four-wheel
are
contributed Unnecessary verb
apply
in
more than one of two air pollution spills.
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to
On the other hand
, as it can be a need to repair and reconstruction
prior methods, cannot be denied that Replace the word
reconstruct
this
action might cause more and more money and labour supply due to
the fact that those are out of order. For example
, despite the fact that cars or cycles are more convinient
, each of which can Correct your spelling
convenient
be result
in Change the verb form
result
delay
for appointments or any daily activity.
In conclusion, to compare fast Fix the agreement mistake
delays
railway
with other Fix the agreement mistake
railways
way
and means of public transportation railway has had more benefits to citizens, owing to its high pace, and being Fix the agreement mistake
ways
environmental
friendly.Change the adjective
environmentally
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