In a number of counties, some people think it is necessary to spend large sums of money on constructing new railway lines for very fast trains between cities. Others believe the money should be spent on improving existing public transport.

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building new railways for fast trains
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that
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money should be spent on
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improving
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and money than
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constructing
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fast trains are
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beneficial to
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than others.
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both views. On
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hand, fast trains are much time
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of transport and
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can help people be more punctual
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in big crowded cities.
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traffic jams which can result in air pollution
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number of cars on
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transportation, either personal car or even bus
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more than one of two air pollution spills.
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prior methods, cannot be denied that
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in
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for appointments or any daily activity. In conclusion, to compare fast
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with other
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and means of public transportation railway has had more benefits to citizens, owing to its high pace, and being
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friendly.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • high-speed trains
  • travel time
  • business activities
  • tourism
  • cutting-edge technology
  • competitive
  • global scale
  • innovation
  • progress
  • alleviate traffic congestion
  • lower carbon emissions
  • sustainable mode of transportation
  • cost-effective
  • existing infrastructure
  • upgrades
  • positive impact
  • daily commutes
  • quality of life
  • environmental disruption
  • natural landscapes
  • urban skylines
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