You arranged to visit a friend in Canada but an important event at home now means that you must change that dates of the visit. Write a letter to your friend. In your letter Explain the important event Apologise for the situation Suggest a new arrangement
Dear John,
How are you,
Why I am
addressing
Verb problem
writing
this
letter to you is, also
I don't
free
time Add a missing verb
have free
this
Correct determiner usage
that
day
because I'm busy.
Hi, my friend, John I'm sorry. I can't
go your
Change preposition
to your
at
house Change preposition
apply
this days
because my brother is wedding Change the determiner
this day
these days
this
Correct determiner usage
that
day
. I look forward to this
wedding and I love my sibling also
my brother is now very happy. So, can't
visit your
at home but I will go Correct pronoun usage
you
other
Correct article usage
the other
day
your
at house. I will hope accept me.
Correct your spelling
you're
Furthermore
, my friend, John I'm sorry and I am very upset for you and myself. I miss you. Also
, you will wait
me Add the preposition
wait for
other
Change the wording
another day
other days
day
please
. I believeAdd a comma
, please
,
you don'Remove the comma
apply
t
upset me. You
extremely dear Add a verb
You are
You were
for
me.
Change preposition
to
Moreover
, I love you my friend and you will be wait
me Wrong verb form
waiting for
in
27 January. I hopeChange the preposition
on
,
you will be free time these days. If you want, I will go to your house another Remove the comma
apply
day
. Just don't
be upset with me.
I am looking forward to you
answer.
Best wishes,
Smith.Change the pronoun
your
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coherence cohesion
The letter lacks clear paragraphs, which makes it difficult to follow the ideas. To improve, organize content into clear paragraphs with each one presenting a distinct idea or point.
coherence cohesion
Start the letter with a formal greeting and end it with a formal closing. Also, work on using appropriate language register and transitions between sentences to increase the letter's readability.
task achievement
Ensure that you address all parts of the prompt in your response. You should explain the event, apologize, and suggest new arrangements in more detail.
task achievement
The writing tone is informal and inconsistent. Use a consistently polite and formal tone throughout the letter to show respect and maintain formality.
Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
Linking words are very important in your essay.
To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.
Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.
In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.
Linking word examples:
- firstly
- secondly
- thirdly
- in additional
- moreover
- also
- for example
- for instance
- therefore
- however
- although
- even though
- despite
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