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The pie chart shows the amount of money that a children's charity located in the USA spent and received in one year. Revenue Sources Donated Food 86.6% Other Income 0.4% Expenditures Program Services 95.8% Government Community Investment Grants 0.2% Contributions Income Fundraising 2.6% 10.4% Program 0.2% Management and General Revenue 2.2% Total $53,561,580 1.6% Total $53,224,896

The pie chart shows the amount of money that a children's charity located in the USA spent and received in one year. Revenue Sources Donated Food 86.6% Other Income 0.4% Expenditures Program Services 95.8% Government Community Investment Grants 0.2% Contributions Income Fundraising 2.6% 10.4% Program 0.2% Management and General Revenue 2.2% Total $53,561,580 1.6% Total $53,224,896
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The charts illustrate the total amount of donations for children in the USA with the types of fund distribution and
revenue
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sources
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 in one
year
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.
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, the children's charity has a slightly higher
income
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 than the outcomes. The
revenue
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sources
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 had been dominated by the donated food and much money was spent on the
program
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 services. The total children's charity received in one
year
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 is $53.561.580.
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, the
Revenue
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sources
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 dominated by the donation of food in a
year
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 was around 85,6%. The second highest from community contributions was 10,4% of the total.
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, 3% of the remaining
revenue
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sources
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 were from
program
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revenue
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, investment
income
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, government grant and other
income
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 with 2,2%, 0.2%, 0.2%, and 0,4%, respectively. In the previous
year
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, expenses were smaller than
income
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, about $53. 224. 890. For the most part, money spent on
program
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 services is around 95,8%.
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, just over 3% was used for fundraising (2%) and Management and general (1,6%).
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, it is crystal clear that the donated food accounted for the highest source of
revenue
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,
while
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 the
program
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 services made up the most significant percentage of expenditure. Total
revenue
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 outstripped or exceeded total expenses.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "overall".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words revenue, sources, year, income, program with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "amount" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
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