The table and charts below give information participants who have entered the Olymics since it began.
the graphs display the number of participants in the Olympics, in the years 1924, 1952, 1984, and 2012, being
men
and women
as the main features.
Overall
, the participation
of both genders in the Olympics increased slightly, but the participation
of men
was highest
than Replace the word
higher
women
data.
The first bar chart illustrates the participation
of men
and women
in the Olympics, and there are a large portion of men
participated in that event, growing rapidly every year. In 1924 women
had insignificant participation
and only after in
1984 with data over 1000, Change preposition
apply
the
number rise until get almost 5000 Add a missing verb
did the
women
participants.
The line graph shows a gradual growth in general participation
, and after 1984 the data show a dramatic increase in that eventSubmitted by jennitobon16 on
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