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The tables below give information about the sales of Fairtrade-labelled coffee and bananas in 1999 and 2004 in five European countries

The tables below give information about the sales of Fairtrade-labelled coffee and bananas in 1999 and 2004 in five European countries
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The tables showed the comparison of Fairtrade-labelled
coffee
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 and
banana
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sales
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 in various countries between 1999 and 2004.
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,
banana
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sales
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 in different countries increased from 1999 to 2004,
whereas
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 the
sales
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 of Fairtrade-labelled bananas experienced a decline during the same period. The highest increase in
coffee
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sales
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 was UK, which increased from 1.5 to 20
million
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of
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euros
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 during the period 1999 to 2004.
By contrast
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, Denmark and Sweden experienced a
slighlt
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slight
slightly
 increase of 2
million
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euros
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 in
coffee
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sales
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 in 2004, starting from 1.8
million
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 and 0.8
million
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euros
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 respectively in 1999.
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, Switzerland's
coffee
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sales
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 doubled from 3
million
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euros
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 in 1999 to 6
million
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euros
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 in 2004,
while
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 Belgium's figures rose from 1
million
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euros
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 in 1999 to 1.7
million
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euros
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 in 2004. The most significant increase in
banana
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sales
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 was in Switzerland, which climbed from 15
million
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euros
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 in 1999 to 47
million
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euros
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 in 2004. The UK
also
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 saw a dramatic rise, from 1
million
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 to 5.5
million
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euros
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. Belgium's
banana
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sales
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 went up from 0.6
million
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 to 4
million
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euros
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.
In contrast
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, Sweden experienced a small decrease, dropping from 1.8
million
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 to 1
million
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euros
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. Denmark's
sales
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also
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 fell from 2
million
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 to 0.9
million
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euros
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 during the same period.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "also".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words coffee, banana, sales, million, euros with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 5 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Fairtrade sales
  • significant growth
  • trends and patterns
  • market expansion
  • sustainable consumption
  • ethical products
  • consumer awareness
  • economic impact
  • percentage increase
  • market share
  • profit margins
  • trade initiatives
  • consumer behavior
  • retail figures
  • economic indicators
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