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The maps compare the village’s development of Stockeford in 1930 and 2010 within 80 years.

The maps compare the village’s development of Stockeford in 1930 and 2010 within 80 years.
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 maps below demonstrate the differences in the village's improvement of Stockford between the years 1930 and 2010 within 80 years.
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, there were lots of farmlands in 1930 and two shops but they both vanished in 2010 and were replaced by a huge amount of houses before and after the bridge and the post office and the primary school in
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 locations. In 1930 , the majority were for lands of animals
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 both sides of the village with only 2 shop stores , with the primary school on the east of the bridge with a small garden next to a large house , with the post office in the south of shops. In 2010 , all vanished except the post office and the school , and all farms
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replaced by houses everywhere with a retirement home in place of the large home.
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