The chart shows the average life expectancy for males and females in 1900, 1950 and 1990.

The chart shows the average life expectancy for males and females in 1900, 1950 and 1990.
The chart below illustrates the average life expectancy for different genders in during 3 different years between 5 countries.
Also
, In 1900 Sweden had the highest average life expectancy among the other countries.
According to
the graph, In 1900 Austria had the lowest
rate
about 37.8 for males and 39.9 for females.
However
, In 1990
this
country had the highest life expectancy
than
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the others exactly 73.5 for men and 80.4 for
women
.
In addition
, Belgium and Austria had the same
rate
in 1990 for
women
.
Furthermore
, In 1950 the highest
rate
for
women
was blonge to Sweden, the
rate
was 72.6.
As a result
, In 1990 females had the highest
rate
than
the
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males except
of
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Denmark. In conclusion, Austria started with the lowest
rate
for males in 1900 ,
while
it finished with the highest
rate
for men in 1990.
Moreover
, Germany started with the lowest average for females in 1900,
whereas
it finished with the highest
rate
in 1990 for
women
.
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