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The graph below shows the number of shops that closed and the number of new shops that opened in опе country between 2011 and 2018. Summarise the information Ьу selecting and reporting the main features, and make compari

The graph below shows the number of shops that closed and the number of new shops that opened in опе country between 2011 and 2018. Summarise the information Ьу selecting and reporting the main features, and make compari
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The line
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graph
 illustrates the
amount
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number
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 of stores that shut
and
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down and
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amount
 of outlets that
newly
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were newly
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 established in a nation
inbetween
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between
 2011 and 2018.
Overall
,in 2011 more new establishments were unlached
comared
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compared
 to
store
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the store
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 closing rate in that
year
, and
this
 trend fluctuated within the rest of the concercative years to
achive
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achieve
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a
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more stable closure of shops than
theire
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their
there
 establishment
at
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in
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 the
year
 2016 and onward till 2018. In detail, in the
year
2011
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2011,
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 approximately 8500 shops were
opend
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opened
open
,and
thereafter
, that number dropped suddenly to 4000 in the next
year
.
After
this
, the
amount
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number
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 of new
opennings
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openings
increase
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increases
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steadiely
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steadily
untill
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until
 the
year
 2014,
upto
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up to
 around 6100 shops in that
year
.
Then
, again
number
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the number
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decresed
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decreased
 sharply to around 4000
outlet
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outlets
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 during
next
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the next
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cosercative
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consecutive
year
 and that
amount
 remained more or less constant
during
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from
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 2015 to 2017, and
then
 it again
decresed
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decreased
decreases
 gradually to achieve new
openning
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opening
 of retailers to 3000 in the
year
 2018.
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