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The charts below show what percentage of their daily intake of various nutrients the average person in the USA consumes in each meal and in snacks. These nutrients may be unhealthy if eaten too much.

The charts below show what percentage of their daily intake of various nutrients the average person in the USA consumes in each meal and in snacks. These nutrients may be unhealthy if eaten too much.
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The given data illustrate the average of nutrients individuals use in their food every day. The
people
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 will be in poor health if they too much consumed.
Overall
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, the number of
sodium
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 and saturated fat are the highest consumed daily at night.
in contrast
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,
snacks
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 are the highest consumption of
sugar
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.
to begin
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 with,
sodium
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 and saturated fat almost have a similar trend. the highest both of them consumed by
people
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 when they have dinner at 43% and 37%. The second highest
this
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 ingredient
consumed
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is consumed
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 when
people
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 in the USA have lunch at 29%
sodium
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 and 26% saturated fat. the least
sodium
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 used by American
people
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 in
snacks
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 and breakfast at 14% for each,
while
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 saturated fat at 21% in
snacks
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. breakfast is the lowest consumption of saturated fat at 16%.
snacks
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 are the highest consumed
sugar
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 by American
people
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 at 42 %. afterwards, dinner is the second highest of typical meals using
sugar
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 at 23%.
People
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 usually eat
sugar
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 when they have lunch at 19%,
while
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breakfastis
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breakfast is
breakfasts
breakfast
 3% less than lunch.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words people, sodium, snacks, sugar with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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