The charts below show what percentage of their daily intake of various nutrients the average person in the USA consumes in each meal and in snacks. These nutrients may be unhealthy if eaten too much.

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The given data illustrate the average of nutrients individuals use in their food every day. The

people

will be in poor health if they too much consumed.

Overall

, the number of

sodium

and saturated fat are the highest consumed daily at night.

in contrast

snacks

are the highest consumption of

sugar

to begin

with,

sodium

and saturated fat almost have a similar trend. the highest both of them consumed by

people

when they have dinner at 43% and 37%. The second highest

this

ingredient

consumed

Add a missing verb

is consumed

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when

people

in the USA have lunch at 29%

sodium

and 26% saturated fat. the least

sodium

used by American

people

snacks

and breakfast at 14% for each,

while

saturated fat at 21% in

snacks

. breakfast is the lowest consumption of saturated fat at 16%.

snacks

are the highest consumed

sugar

by American

people

at 42 %. afterwards, dinner is the second highest of typical meals using

sugar

at 23%.

People

usually eat

sugar

when they have lunch at 19%,

while

breakfastis

Correct your spelling

breakfast is

breakfasts

breakfast

3% less than lunch.

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