The charts below show what percentage of their daily intake of various nutrients the average person in the USA consumes in each meal and in snacks. These nutrients may be unhealthy if eaten too much.

The charts below show what percentage of their daily intake of various nutrients the average person in the USA consumes in each meal and in snacks. These nutrients may be unhealthy if eaten too much.
The given data illustrate the average of nutrients individuals use in their food every day. The
people
will be in poor health if they too much consumed.
Overall
, the number of
sodium
and saturated fat are the highest consumed daily at night.
in contrast
,
snacks
are the highest consumption of
sugar
.
to begin
with,
sodium
and saturated fat almost have a similar trend. the highest both of them consumed by
people
when they have dinner at 43% and 37%. The second highest
this
ingredient
consumed
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when
people
in the USA have lunch at 29%
sodium
and 26% saturated fat. the least
sodium
used by American
people
in
snacks
and breakfast at 14% for each,
while
saturated fat at 21% in
snacks
. breakfast is the lowest consumption of saturated fat at 16%.
snacks
are the highest consumed
sugar
by American
people
at 42 %. afterwards, dinner is the second highest of typical meals using
sugar
at 23%.
People
usually eat
sugar
when they have lunch at 19%,
while
breakfastis
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breakfast is
breakfasts
breakfast
3% less than lunch.
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