IELTS Writing Correction Service
Writing Samples
Band 4.5

Some people say that the only reason for learning a foreign language is in order to travel t oto or work in a foreign country. Others say that these are not the only reasons why someone should learn a foreign language . Discuss both views and give your own opinion

✨ Do you want to improve your IELTS writing?
The
numbers
Fix the agreement mistake
number
show examples
 of
stuyding
Correct your spelling
studying
 a second
language
Use synonyms
are
Correct subject-verb agreement
is
show examples
 increasing nowadays. Some individuals argue that
people
Use synonyms
 learn another
language
Use synonyms
for
Change preposition
by
show examples
 going
to
Remove the preposition
apply
show examples
abroad or finding
job
Add an article
a job
show examples
,
while
Linking Words
 others
thought
Wrong verb form
think
show examples
 that there are so many reasons for it. In my opinion,
the
Correct article usage
apply
show examples
students learn external
languages
Use synonyms
by
Change preposition
for
show examples
 a lot of
purpose
Change to a plural noun
purposes
show examples
. On the
one
Use synonyms
 hand ,
majority
Correct article usage
the majority
show examples
 of
mankinds
Correct your spelling
mankind
 commenced to attending a course for training
international
Change preposition
in international
show examples
language
Use synonyms
for getting
Change preposition
to get
show examples
good
Correct article usage
a good
show examples
 salary or
visiting
Wrong verb form
visit
show examples
other part
Change the wording
another part
other parts
show examples
 of the world.
In other words
Linking Words
, when a person
completed
Wrong verb form
completes
show examples
advancement
Correct article usage
an advancement
show examples
 level in a non-native
language
Use synonyms
, he would visit developing
contries
Correct your spelling
countries
 or earn good money in their
jobs
Fix the agreement mistake
job
show examples
. The Ange research company in Turkey
fonded
Verb problem
found
show examples
 in a survey , %90 of young
people
Use synonyms
 could
be
Verb problem
begin
show examples
 began job abroad
by
Change preposition
in
show examples
high
Correct article usage
a high
show examples
 position.
This
Linking Words
 is because they achieved success in international
language
Use synonyms
exam
Fix the agreement mistake
exams
show examples
.
On the other hand
Linking Words
, the participating course is unable to limit
one
Use synonyms
 condition. Most
of
Change preposition
apply
show examples
the
Correct article usage
apply
show examples
people
Use synonyms
 have
learn
Fix the infinitive
to learn
show examples
 a non-mother
language
Use synonyms
by
Change preposition
with
show examples
 different goals
such
Linking Words
 as knowing
new
Add an article
a new
show examples
 culture,
new
Correct word choice
and new
show examples
people
Use synonyms
 and researching
in
Change preposition
apply
show examples
one
Use synonyms
 academic topic in their field.
For example
Linking Words
, most
of
Change preposition
apply
show examples
university
Fix the agreement mistake
universities
show examples
 in China
conditioned
Verb problem
have
show examples
 a rule that if a student
want
Change the verb form
wants
show examples
 to start writing his thesis , he must
obtains
Change the verb form
obtain
show examples
 certificates in
Correct article usage
the
show examples
other two
languages
Use synonyms
.
Therefore
Linking Words
, the students will be contributing
in
Change preposition
to
show examples
 their sectors. Personally,
although
Linking Words
priority
Correct article usage
the priority
show examples
 reason for training in
overseas
Add an article
the overseas
an overseas
show examples
language
Use synonyms
 is
traveling
Change the spelling
travelling
show examples
 abroad or
job
Correct article usage
a job
show examples
, I mention that
people
Use synonyms
lean
Correct your spelling
learn
show examples
second
Correct article usage
a second
show examples
language
Use synonyms
by
Change preposition
for
show examples
 different goals.
For instance
Linking Words
, the
ministry
Capitalize word
Ministry
show examples
 of
education
Capitalize word
Education
show examples
 in Egypt summarized
in
Change preposition
apply
show examples
ten benefits to
person
Add an article
a person
the person
show examples
.
One
Use synonyms
 of
important
Correct article usage
the important
show examples
 from it that the other first
language
Use synonyms
help
Correct subject-verb agreement
helps
show examples
improving
Wrong verb form
improve
show examples
 their mother
Use synonyms
languages
Fix the agreement mistake
language
show examples
. In conclusion. there
no
Add a missing verb
is no
show examples
 doubt that a non-indigenous
language
Use synonyms
 proper us visit other places
of
Change preposition
in
show examples
 the world.
However
Linking Words
, I agree with
people
Use synonyms
say
Wrong verb form
saying
show examples
 that if a person
have
Change the verb form
has
show examples
 two
languages
Use synonyms
 he would live
in
Change preposition
on
show examples
 two different
island
Change to a plural noun
islands
show examples
.

Unauthorized use and/or duplication of this material without express and written permission from this site's author and/or owner is strictly prohibited. Excerpts and links may be used, provided that full and clear credit is given to Writing9 with appropriate and specific direction to the original content.

Grammar & Vocabulary
There are noticeable issues with grammatical structures and word choice that may occasionally impede communication. Focus on using correct verb tenses, prepositions, and articles. Ensure that sentences are well-constructed and convey clear meaning.
Coherence & Cohesion
Your essay shows an attempt at providing a logical structure, but there are areas where ideas could be more clearly developed and organized. Transition words are inconsistently used, and paragraphing can be improved to enhance the logical flow of ideas.
Task Achievement
While you have presented both views, the essay's arguments occasionally lack clarity and specificity. Develop points further with detailed examples, and ensure that your opinion is clearly stated and consistent throughout the essay.
What to do next:
Look at other essays: