Whether or not someone achieves their aims is mostly by a question of luck. To what extent do you agree or not agree?
It has been said that fortune plays a vital role in the
life
to attain the goals. I, myself partially agree with this
statement as I believe hard work and dedication also
contribute a lot to become
successful in Wrong verb form
becoming
life
. In this
essay, I will discuss why am not totally agree with the notion.
On the one hand side, it is true that luck
is very important for successful
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a successful
life
. For example
, being born in
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into
wealthy
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a wealthy
families
is considered to be Fix the agreement mistake
family
luckiest
, because parents can afford anything Correct article usage
the luckiest
to
their children and allows them to get Change preposition
for
better
education. Setting up a business is very easy for them as they don'Add an article
a better
t
have to borrow any money from someone
. Moreover
, born
with talent is another example of fortune, Add a missing verb
being born
as
if Correct word choice
apply
someone
have
any kind of talent like singing or dancing, with Change the verb form
has
this
energy someone
can acquire
his or her aim. Verb problem
achieve
Hence
, having better luck
leads to better outcomes to be successful.
On the other hand
side, there is no denying that luck
is not important for success, but hard work and determination also
play a big role in people's life
. Fix the agreement mistake
lives
For example
, if someone
set
up a goal to become a soldier he or she cannot be successful if doesn'Wrong verb form
sets
t
put any efforts
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effort
in
the training. Change preposition
into
Furthermore
, person
is not able to reach Add an article
a person
the person
at
its target if they don'Change preposition
apply
t
focus on it and don't
have determination. No doubt, on the way there might be difficulties, but when the goal is achieved, it create
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creates
different
kind Correct article usage
a different
happiness
which cannot be with Change preposition
of happiness
luck
.
In conclusion, while
I agree that luck
is important in life
but
it Correct word choice
apply
also
requires hard work for better outcomes. People cannot stay only on fortune, they have to put much
more Change preposition
in much
efforts
.Fix the agreement mistake
effort
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