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The chart below shows the amount spent on six consumer goods in four European countries. Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information shown below. Spending in Thousand Pound Sterling

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The bar graph depicts the amount spent on six
consumer
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goods
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 in four European countries:
Britain
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, France, Italy and
Germany
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.
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, it is readily apparent that
Britain
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 has spent more on
consumer
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goods
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.
However
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, the tennis racquets were the least good. Looking at the details, we can see that photographic film was the most spent by four European countries, even the most used in
goods
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 paid for by
Britain
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.
Germany
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 accounted for 167 and 145, respectively.
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, perfumes in
Britain
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 have observed at 160%, and Italy depicts 155%,
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 the most miniature
consumer
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goods
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 have shown the Framce which at 148%.
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, in the bar graphs, we can observe that personal stereos in France and
Germany
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 have the same amount of
consumer
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goods
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, 147%. We observe that the toy
goods
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 in France and Italy were the same as witnessed, even though the lowest
goods
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 were shown in
Germany
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.
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, the toys and CDs were the same
consumer
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goods
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 in
Germany
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.

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Basic structure: Write more paragraphs.
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Basic structure: Add more body paragraphs.
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Basic structure: Write more paragraphs.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 70%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words consumer, goods, britain, germany with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "amount" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Only 3 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "depicts" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 2 times.
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