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The world is experiencing dramatic in population,which is causing problems not only for developing countries but also for developed nations Describe some of the problems that overpopulation causes and suggest at least one possible solution.

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In recent times, a rapid increase in population has been witnessed all over the globe, which is a cause of concern for everyone.
This
 stressful situation not only
lead
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 to a variety of issues for the underdeveloped continents but
also
 for the advanced and progressive states which will be discussed in
this
 essay in detail.
Firstly
, As the population of a
country
 increases, the demand of a
country
also
 increases.
For instance
, the increase in members of a family puts a certain amount of load on the breadwinner of the family, which ultimately causes
further
 problems in society. The main problem
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 demographic growth causes
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 the shortage of natural resources which are already limited
such
 as food, shelter and
high
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 cost of living which leads to an
overall
 degradation of the environment.
Secondly
, an ever-increasing growth in
population
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 of
a
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 underdeveloped
country
also
 raises the rate of criminal activities in the region, which leads towards
further
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 downfall of the developing nation.
Nevertheless
, there is no doubt that social and economic stability are considered the strong pillars of a
country
.
For example
, if a
country
 is facing many issues related to a weak social and economic infrastructure
such
 as overpopulation, ever-increasing crime rate,corruption and many others, there is no doubt that
this
 infrastructure structure will be collapsed within the next few decades.
However
,there is a possible solution for tackling
this
 challenge. One possible solution is creating public awareness by introducing policies to manage the overpopulation of the state.
Moreover
, Nowadays, social media platforms are considered an important advertising tool for creating awareness related to any social and political scenario. We must utilise them effectively to ensure positive results.
To conclude
, I strongly believe that the challenge of overpopulation can still be tackled by the implementation of some effective measures
such
 as the introduction of family planning in newly-married couples.
Moreover
, there is a strong need to create public awareness in the developing nations about
this
 situation. A global unity is important to tackle
this
 situation.
Thus
, it is essential to take complete responsibility for educating young couples about the importance of the family planning system.
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