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Band 3.5

People who live in large cities face a range of problems in their daily life. What are the main problems people in cities face, how can these problems be tackled?

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In today’s fast-paced
world
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 a lot of people choose to live in huge
cities
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. It is true that
,
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 large
cities
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also
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 face several daily
problems
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. There are a variety of reasons for
this
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 but steps can be taken to tackle the problem. In my opinion, these substantial
problems
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 depend on
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cities’
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the cities’
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 population and environment. There are two main factors which can cause
problems
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. At
first,
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the high density of people and vehicles in one area
lead
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leads
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 to air pollution, which can have negative effects on public health. Another significant influence is that
,
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 large
cities
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 often have limited green space.
Lack
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 of green plants has many disadvantages for humans.
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instance
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 it can
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affect
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 mental health and quality of life. The state of
cities
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 can be improved. I think at
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government
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the government
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 should take into consideration these
problems
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. I believe that
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 the changes
mast
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must
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 start with
area’s
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the area’s
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 transportation. Individuals should leave their own cars at home and they have to use only public transport.
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 buses,
subways
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and subways
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 or they can use bikes. It has a lot of benefits for people’s health and
environment
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the environment
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. For
this
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, the state of public transport and
condition
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the condition
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 of roads must be improved. At the same
time
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time,
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 humans in
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this
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these
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cities
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 need to stop cutting trees.
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 of
this
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, they have to
green
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have green
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 parks near
to
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public areas. In conclusion, large
cities
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 will continue to face
range
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a range
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 of
problems
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 in their daily life unless
government
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the government
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 and all citizens set clear rules.

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coherence cohesion
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coherence cohesion
Support main points with more detailed examples and explanations to enhance the quality of your arguments and to provide a deeper understanding to the reader.
task achievement
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task achievement
Provide more relevant and specific examples to back up your claims and to strengthen your arguments. Also, use a variety of cohesive devices to link your ideas and sentences more effectively.

Your opinion

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Don’t leave your opinion until the conclusion.

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...do you agree or disagree?...do you think...?...your opinion...?

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • urbanization
  • metropolis
  • commute
  • public transportation
  • gridlock
  • air pollution
  • noise pollution
  • expensive housing
  • exorbitant prices
  • work-life balance
  • recreation areas
  • parks and gardens
  • criminal activities
  • security measures
  • density
  • neighborhood
  • public amenities
  • healthcare facilities
  • educational institutions
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