Levels of youth crimes are increasing rapidly in youth cities around the world. What are the reasons for this and suggest some solutions. Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own experience or knowledge.

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modern era, juvenile

deliquency

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delinquency

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bad effect on everyone in the world. The ratio of

crime

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rates among youngsters is increasing dramatically all over the globe. There are many

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issue and can be solved with relevant solutions. In

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with some good ideas to resolve the problem.

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with, there are two main

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why

crime

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has been

commited

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committed

by youngsters.

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problem is the highest frequency of unemployment. Living life without

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bad effect, which

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a person to commit

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crime

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conducted in India about

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on top and just because of family needs and to meet small household expenses youth start stealing, either from shops or

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pocketing. Another main issue is peer pressure by families on their

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. These days many parents

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compel

their

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to go out and start earning

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if they don't get any

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family kick them out of the house by saying they are not able to feed them.

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, juveniles

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do not think about right or wrong, they just do whatever they want.

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, there are many other

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why

crime

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is increasing, but

accoriding

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to me, being jobless and peer pressure are the main issues. To solve

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problem,

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step should be taken by

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ministery

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minister

, the number of unemployed people should be decreased by providing work. It is said that if someone is busy in his or her life and

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earning they will not get a chance to think about

wrong doings

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, Families should understand their

children

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and should not force them

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anything, but should keep an eye on them what they are doing is right or wrong. In consequence,

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problems can

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with

right

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solutions. In conclusion, there is no doubt about the increasing numbers

criminals

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of criminals

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in the world and

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is happening mainly

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less

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jobs and peer pressure. To tackle

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concern, the authority should move forward and provide jobs. Families should

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think about their

children

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's feelings.

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Levels of youth crimes are increasing rapidly in youth cities around the world. What are the reasons for this and suggest some solutions. Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own experience or knowledge.

Support ideas with relevant, specific examples

In many countries, the number of animals and plants is declining. Why do you think this is happening? How can this issue be solved?

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