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Band 4.5

Many students choose to take a gap year before starting university, to travel, or gain work experience. Do you think this is a good idea or a waste of time?

I believe it is a great idea to take a
gap
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year
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 before starting
university
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. Most students are not prepared for the transition from secondary school to
university
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,
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sure was one of them. I started
university
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 at 15 years old
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 I was unprepared, scared, naive and insecure. I had no experience with negotiating, standing up for myself, articulating my ideas and not regurgitating the thoughts of others. In a scenario where I had the opportunity of taking a
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year
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, to travel to other countries within Africa that had different cultural practices from Nigeria and Ghana, I feel I would have been better prepared upon arriving
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ukraine
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Ukraine
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.
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 without travelling, having the opportunity of gaining work experience would have greatly improved my early days in Ukraine
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 I would be more able to negotiate for better outcomes and articulate my
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arguments
 better.
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 I think it is a good idea to take a
gap
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year
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, the reality is that not a lot of people have the chance to.
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 take me
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, I am the first of 4 kids
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, and
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 I always have to be a good example for my
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siblings
. What good
an
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apply
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example would I be if I asked for a
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year
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due to
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 not being ready for
university
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and
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 who was going to pay for it? It is not always possible to do
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which
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we feel we must
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 life is not a fairytale
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 I believe
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resiliency
 and adaptation are part of the most important skills to learn and teach our kids. Because the world will ask questions of us
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 it does not care if we are ready or not.

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structure
Plan your answer with a short map. Start with a small intro that states your view. Then give two ideas with a simple example. End with a short conclusion.
cohesion
Make each paragraph carry one main idea. Start with a clear sentence and use simple joining words like first, next, also, but, so.
accuracy
Check spelling and grammar. Fix easy mistakes like arg u ments and siblings.
examples
Use real examples that fit the point. Keep them short and clear to link to your view.
idea
The writer shows a clear view that a gap year can help.
tone
There is a personal touch from life story.
cohesion
Some good use of linking words to connect ideas.
Fully explain your ideas

To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

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