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Many students choose to take a gap year before starting university, to travel, or gain work experience. Do you think this is a good idea or a waste of time?

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There is an increasing tendency among students to take a gap year before starting university. The purpose of
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 to travel, gain some work experience or just improve skills. Some
people
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 think it is a good idea,
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 others consider it is not. In my
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opinion
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this
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 gap is a good opportunity for students to achieve their different goals. The first and foremost reason
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 is that can help to achieve some useful skills, which help them in the future. The person can go for a job, study a new language, read books, help their parents or relatives. All these things are building confidence in
people
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. The second one is
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 to see the world and enjoy some
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precious
 moments of freedom. Once they grow up, they are more unlikely to have
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 a lot.
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, it can help enhance
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communication skills, which is so
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important
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, many
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 that
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 sort of
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 are not important and can be
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associated
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time.
Futhermore
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Furthermore
, it may
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 problems in studying and learning.
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people
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 that you need to study hard in order to have a good job in the future and don't allow any
dastractions
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distractions
distraction
 moments. It is always said:"No
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 gain". In conclusion, I want to say that it is up to everyone what they have chosen, but I strongly agree there must be a line between hard learning or working and living. If you have a chance to gain an extra experience or enjoy travelling, just take your chance.
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, no one wants to say one day: "If I had
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 chance some years ago, I would have seen the world as I have always wanted. We all deserve to be happy and enjoy our lives.

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coherence
Work on improving the logical flow between sentences and ideas. Make sure to clearly connect your supporting points to your main argument.
task achievement
Enhance your use of specific examples to support your points. This will help to strengthen your arguments.
language
Make sure to check your spelling and grammar for minor errors. This will improve the overall clarity of your writing.
task achievement
Try to elaborate more on the benefits of taking a gap year with concrete examples or anecdotes.
content
Your introduction effectively sets the context for the topic and presents your viewpoint clearly.
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You've presented valid reasons in favor of taking a gap year, which shows your understanding of the topic.

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For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

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