The chart below shows the number of trips made by children in one country in 1990 and 2010 to travel to and from school using different modes of transport.
The bar chart demonstrates the number of school commutes that were done by children using different modes of transport in 1990 and 2010. There are five types of travel methods in the chart, which are travelling by car, bicycle, bus, walking and bus, and
also
by walking only. The most used way of travel in 1990 was by walking. Nonetheless
, in 2010, the most used transport mode was replaced by cars.
In 1990, more than 12 million
students
were commuting to and from school by walking. Also
, more than six million
students
were using the bus and cycling as their transport mode. In 2010, the trend changed. In fact, the car was the most used transportation, with a total of 11 million
students
. For the rest modes, The number of students
who were still using was below 6 million
students
each, with cycling becoming the least favourite (only 2 million
students
).Submitted by shafatriviaa on
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